Friday, 20 March 2015


Last week on Monday the year 4’s went Motat to learn about inventions we went on an old school bus.

We came and met the meeting room and listen to our new instructor.Her name is Katherine.

We went to a lot of kiwi inventions we saw old fashion cars.I saw the  village with the old schoolhouse.I saw the cottages jail with stocks.Group 3 arrived at the maze i took one step in and i did not know where to go.The rest of my group hoped in and we where running around everywhere but me and julianna stuck together.Me and  julianna finally found our way out of the maze, it was so interesting.


Criteria for an Effective Paragraph
Par 2
Par 3
Par 4
Par 5
⚈ Start with a topic sentence.

⚈ Have at least 2-3 connected sentences.

⚈ Have sentences that are effective that
  1. have varied beginnings

    b.  have juicy vocab e.g action/describing  words

    (c) grammatically correct

  (d) punctuated correctly.

(Think of 1 or 2 things that you need to to focus on next time, to make sure your paragraphs are effective.)
Next time I  need to make it correct have sentences  juicy vocab

1 comment:

  1. Well done for publishing your Motat writing. Could you please try and publish the table for your reflection. Remember you needed to have a paragraph about each main idea with 2-3 sentences that connected. Your first 2 paragraphs had only 1 sentence each.